Thursday, February 2, 2017

Week 3 Storytelling: The Meeting

The Meeting

Rama after defeating Ravana. Source

Rama defeated Ravana at the Battle of Lanka. This was a celebratory moment for everyone, even the gods that sent him. While Rama and his army were returning to the kingdom, there was a strange feeling in the air. The air started to feel heavy and the sky turned dark. The storm appeared to be a hurricane in the sky. Rama and Hanuman felt a strong wing all of a sudden. However, this was not a wind but actually a gravitational pull coming from the storm in the sky. The gravitational pull picked Rama and Hanuman off the ground and into the eye of the storm. The storm opened into a portal and the two disappeared into the dreary night sky.

A storm appears that transforms into a portal. Source

Time and space warped around them and when they landed back on the ground, they noticed that it was a completely different setting. The two had traveled through space and to a modern-day metropolitan area. There was a crowd of people around them dressed in suits and carrying briefcases. The hero of the city, Wonder Woman, approached them to question who they are and what they are doing. Rama and Hanuman were not sure what they were doing there because everything happened so sudden. Due to their hesitation and farfetched story, Wonder Woman believed that the two were lying and were actually there to cause trouble. She placed the two in a cell in the county jailhouse. 

A few hours passed by before people from Rama’s era started falling from the sky as well. However, these people falling from the sky were enemies of Rama and instantly started causing terror in the metropolis. This was an extension of Ravana’s army but strangely, it was led by Sita. Due to Ravana’s death, there was a curse put on Sita that finally turned her against Rama, which is what Ravana was constantly trying to do. The curse was placed on Rama by Mandodari, Ravana's widow, to ensure despair on Rama since she now lost her loved one. Wonder Woman knew that somehow this army was related to the two people that she threw in the county jail hours ago. She went to Rama and asked who these people were and what they wanted. He convinced her that he was on the good side and needed her help to get rid of them.

Rama meeting Wonder Woman. Source

Rama was telling Wonder Woman how the leader of the people attacking was his wife but it appeared that she was under some type of curse to seek and kill him. Wonder Woman, Rama, and Hanuman went back to Wonder Woman’s office to get supplies. One of the weapons that Wonder Woman gave to Rama was the Bow of Vayu, which Rama believed was just some type of fancy bow. When they returned outside, it was the three of them versus the army in front of them. Wonder Woman was able to use her trusty lasso for attacking multiple targets, while using her gauntlets and shield to protect from sword and archer attacks. Hanuman was a master with hand-to-hand combat and able to take on a crowd of enemies at once. Rama and Sita were left alone to a one versus one battle. Rama was hesitant at first because this was the love of his life. However, due to the curse, Sita had no remembrance of their love. She used her strength and threw him into a nearby building within the blink of an eye. This is when Rama was trying to verbally reason with her and she once again pummeled him with her outstanding strength. Rama finally gave in and started to fight back. He noticed that anything that he tried would have zero effect on Sita. The curse was somehow making her invincible. Rama pulled out the Bow of Vayu but when he went to reach for an arrow, there were none left in his quiver. Sita forced Rama into the ground. He realized at this moment that the Sita he loved was no longer there and that he must destroy this being. Sita pulled her fist back and was about to swing it into Rama, which most likely would have killed him, when suddenly Wonder Woman lassoed Sita’s feet and swung her on the floor. Due to the emptiness that Rama felt, a glowing arrow appeared in the quiver. The Bow of Vayu was the exact opposite of Cupid’s bow. The fact that he knew that he could not love Sita anymore made the arrow appear. He loaded the arrow in the Bow of Vayu and fired it at Sita. It hit her right in the stomach and she instantly turned into dust. The battle was now over but it left the entire city devastated.     

Rama deals the final blow, saving earth with Wonder Woman and Hanuman. Source



Author's Note:
When I was doing research on Rama, I found a page where DC Comics used Hindu gods in some of their comic issues. The source had a few comic scenes from the issues so I took those and wrote a story around them. Because Ravana was always trying to convince Sita to get rid of Rama in the Ramayana, I wanted to incorporate where after Ravana died, it caused Sita to turn against Rama. Who knows, maybe Rama and Wonder Woman will fall in love! I like adding the twist that Rama and Sita aren’t together because throughout the epic, it seems that they are destined to be together.


I really like this style of writing or reading something like this in stories because it is a mix between two cultures. The story, Ramayana, is an old, traditional epic from India. Wonder woman is a character from the 20th century in America and the style between the two is different yet related. Both of them seem to have some sort of relation with supernatural elements. I feel like DC comics had the similar thought when they first started to introduce the Hindu gods into their comics. They produced with stories with multiple Hindu gods with one of the other well-known ones being Kali.

Public Domain Ramayana, link to the reading online.
Pikapost. link to the website.

13 comments:

  1. Hi Ryan, I read your story planning last week, so I just stop by to check it out! I just want to let you know that this is such an awesome read! The fact that you bring in Wonder Woman is just awesome. I love your descriptions and details. There is not much dialogues, but the action scene that you describe with the illustrations you include in your story really help me imagine the battle! And woa what a plot twist you put on Sita there! I did not expect that at all. Overall, this is very well written! Good job!

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  2. Hey Ryan, this is a really awesome story. I think bringing in Wonder woman was a fantastic idea that I would never have thought of. I think the way you intertwined the two time periods was perfect. It left the perfect amount of mystery along with details that made it seem very plausible.

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  3. Hey Ryan! I enjoyed the way you incorporated the Ramayana with Wonder Woman, it really brought a new dimension to the stories. I didn't know there were DC Comics with Indian epics intertwined in them. It was interesting to see Sita as the antagonist instead of the one that is being rescued in the story. You definitely surprised me when she died at the end, especially from Rama's bow and arrow!

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  4. Hi Ryan! I think it was interesting that you were able to find such an interesting storyline to build upon. I like that you included multiple pictures in your story since most people usually add just one as the required one. It was so sad that she died because their love story was destroyed but a great change of pace at the same time. Great job!

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  5. I really like your twist on making a Ramayana-based story. DC comics and an Indian epic? Genius! I didn’t know DC did anything with Hindu gods, but it was pretty cool how you revolved a story around scenes. Your plotline was very interesting and was very well written. Great job, and I can’t wait to see what else you come up with!

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  6. I really enjoyed this story. I am a big DC Comics fan and this was good. The story was very interesting as well. Kept my attention throughout the story and was entertaining to read. I enjoyed the detail you put into the story, from teleporting through space and time to Rama's epic final battle with Sita. I especially enjoyed the part about Sita being evil, the dramatic twist in the plot made the story really flow well. However I wish their was more dialogue in the story. I find it difficult myself to incorporate dialogue into my stories but I feel like it will add just a bit more detail to the characters and the character's development. I would also like to know how they got teleported through space and time. Was it some higher power seeking conflict between the two groups? Or was the humans from the future looking for help? A big what if question for me to you would be, what if Sita was still inside the vessel and could be saved? That could have added more details to the story not only lengthening it but also enhancing it.

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  7. Ryan,
    This story was so fun! Your story drew me into it in several ways. First, the images you found online which you spun your story around were great. They truly added value because you described the image in so much more detail in the story itself such as the gravitational pull of the storm. I was excited to find out what happened once I read that it was actually a portal.
    Wonder Woman gave the Bow of Vayu to Rama, which was in her office supplies. I am curious how she had that in her stockpile. Has she experienced other events like this or had other visitors from his land before in her city?
    I like the color scheme of your blog, but maybe try out a little bit larger font or separating the third paragraph into a couple smaller ones so that it’s not as easy to get lost in where you are reading.
    Excellent read!

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  8. Wow this story is really cool! I was wondering how you got the pictures you used in it because they fit your story really well! That is so cool that they are from actual Marvel comic books and that you were able to find them! Your story is really creative I really enjoyed reading it. Some of your story was hard to read in past tense, but I wonder what it would be like if you wrote it in present tense? It could also make your story longer because you could tell what the main character was thinking and maybe add in some dialogue. You could also split this off into a couple different stories by telling the story from different perspectives. This story could be from Rama's perspective, and you could tell the next one from Sita's point of view and show us how she got under the curse and what she is thinking while trying to attack Rama. Your stories are fantastic, I love the mix between pop culture and Indian Epics readings! Keep up the good work!!

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  9. I Ryan! Wow, I really like how you set up your story—a comic book style. It’s different and unique, and really expresses your writing. I also enjoyed the imagery you included. I like having pictures to look at when I read—especially when it is a short story, or a twist on a story. The imagery you included are very bold, and make it easier for your readers to picture what you were thinking when you wrote your story. However, I did want to know more about the storm. It was a mysterious element added to your story that I would like to know more about like if Rama and Hanuman could use their powers to stop it somehow. Something you could add to your story to make it more intense would be a fight between your two female characters where they use their powers to defeat one another to test their morals. It’s just a thought, but I enjoyed the story overall!

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  10. Hi Ryan,

    This story was inspired! The only thing you should fix is the setting…Marvel, anyone? (totally kidding). Truly, your take on this episode of the Ramayana demonstrates true creative thinking. I also nerded out a little while reading it, making me a little partial. I loved your use of the graphic novel images throughout the story, and I think that is an option that you should definitely continue to explore in your stories, especially if you have an interest in comic books.
    The “WOW” moment in this story, for me, was the reveal that Sita was in fact the one leading the army of destruction. You had a very strong plot and some very strong moments. If I had to be picky, I would suggest possibly taking more time to set up the action. For example, when Rama and Hanuman first arrive in the city, you could play up their interaction with Wonder Woman more, or even give more detail on their time in the county jail.
    Keep up the great work!

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  11. Hey Ryan! This is the type of story that once you start you can not stop until there are no more words left. It includes excitement, conflict, and a crazy time rift which keeps the reader engaged. The part I enjoyed best was when Rama and Hanuman got sucked into the time portal, and before they even realize what is going on they're in a time unknown to them. The only thing I would change is instead of Wonder Woman going to Rama asking who these other people falling out of the sky are. Rama and Hanuman would just break out of their cell and join in on the fight along side of Wonder Woman. I thought it was a little odd that these people would fall out of the sky and begin terrorizing the city. Yet Wonder Woman's first thought it to abandon the city to go ask some strangers some questions? By the time she gets back to the fight the city could be gone. This is the only scene in the story that I feel could use a little work. I'm looking forward to more comic related stories in the future!

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  12. Hey Ryan,

    Your story was a fun read for someone like me who loves DC Comics. I think it is awesome that you were able to find these pictures and base a story around it. The only thing I saw that was barely an issue was some grammatical errors. Other than that your story was interesting and captivating with each sentence that was displayed on the post. I will add that if you put more background information of your characters it would be easier to relate to. More people will stick with a story if they can somehow relate to what is being read. I think if you described the characters in more depth or described how they were feeling than the story could be stronger. Also describing why some characters made the decisions they than that would help as well. One part of the story that could be given as an example is speaking more about how they got to Wonder Woman sooner and more detail of why they are there. This is a great story regardless and I cannot wait to see what else you come up with.

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  13. This is such a cool concept! Though my DC interest now is centered around the Bat-family (the former Robins more than Batman himself), growing up, Wonder Woman was always my favorite; I loved what you did with her here. Because her existence and essence and so many of her storylines are centered around mythology anyways, combining her story with Indian mythology works beautifully. Not just because of the myth angle, but because she and the epic heroes are both larger-than-life legends from warrior societies.

    As for the story itself, I loved what you’ve made of the different images you found. The idea that Sita is the villain is especially compelling; because of the backstory you added with Ravana’s widow and the curse, it makes total sense, and it’s also such a comic book thing to do. The bow being the antithesis of Cupid’s bow was a really cool move, too.

    My only suggestion is that you break that last paragraph up into smaller paragraphs, so they’re easier to read and the pacing feels faster, something befitting such an intense action scene. Also, depending on how much space you have, it might be cool to focus a little more on the interactions between Wonder Woman and Rama, since that was the hook/heart of the story. But I really enjoyed this, and I’m looking forward to seeing what you write next!

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